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Omg whats that dark shadow over there. It looks like a shark I said nervously. I was so nervous because I had no where to go there was just water all around me. I could just see some sand dunes but that was far away. I could feel little waves around me as the shark was moving. As my board was moving I started paddling faster. When I was paddling faster I started calling out for help. As the shark was coming closer I thought to myself calm down.I was near the sand dunes and there was a lifeguard coming to get me with a electric boat.When the lifeguard came to get me so I hopped on quickly then we went back to the sand dunes.
Can you think of ways of showing the reader how scared you were thinking?
ReplyDeleteHi Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI like that you did a good story. I just think that you should tell us how you were feeling and say if the shark was coming to you.
By Sylvia